Wednesday, May 14, 2008

Faithful

In response to the prompt on Writer's Island on May 8 2008.

He placed the phone receiver back in its cradle. Now there was no turning back. She wished if he could think again, just one last time before parting ways. She enjoyed being with him and that was all she ever wished for. But with time, he has changed. She remembered her earlier days with him, when he could take very good care of her. He would lavishly spend money on her to ensure she was comfortable and looking bright and shiny. His friends too adored her. She had accompanied them to their various excursions and loved being a part of their group.

But his marriage changed everything. At their very first meeting, his wife disliked her. It was clear that she had to go away. She knew she was growing old and could not compete anymore. Once she was beautiful and widely admired but now, there others that people ogled. But still, she could not help feeling bad. She was faithful to him and had never caused any trouble. She wondered if he felt the same way or had he forgotten all the memories they had shared together. Finally the door bell rang. A young college student entered and smiled at her before taking the car keys from him and driving her off.

3 comments:

Pirate Princess said...

Great job of evoking wistful feelings from the reader - sometimes our change is hard for others to swallow! Great take on the other pt of view!

Jaya said...

Texasblu: The take is from the car's point of view. We do change cars multiple times in life. Just thought if a car can have feelings, what would it be like?

aMus said...

hey J, this was a nice view from the other side of the fence... point...

cars are special, esp the first one...